Winning TV PILOT Screenplay – THE VISA by Conrad Haynes

Watch the October 2016 Winning TV PILOT Comedy Screenplay.

Written by Conrad Haynes


Genre: Animated Comedy

A goofball prince and a determined refugee team up to steal coveted travel visas out of their Kingdom and into New America.


NARRATOR – Erynn Brook
LEA – Viktoria Napoleonova
KHAN – Michael Lake
STEPHAN – Martin Huss
PRINCE – Brogan Caulfield
QUEEN – Michelle Alexander

Get to know the winning writer:

What is your TV series about?

Khan realizes being in line for the throne totally sucks, so he tries to escape to New America with his friend Lea, but first they’ll need a visa.


A goofball prince and his best friend team up to steal coveted visas out of their kingdom and into New America!

Why should this screenplay be made into a TV show?

The Visa creates an engaging, original world that feels unlike anything I’ve ever seen before, the characters have a charming and hilarious friendship, and the story lays foundation for an interesting and enticing adventure.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Unlikely Friendship

What TV show do you keep watching over and over again?

I am addicted to Mr. Robot, Archer, and BoJack Horseman!

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

Too long haha.

How many stories have you written?

I’ve written several short films and a few comedy pilots.

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

The Visa, at its inception, was written to be a reflection of my life experiences. I take elements from the racial climate in America, my relationship with ornery family members and bizarre friends, my obsession over pop culture, films, and irrelevant ‘macguffins’. They all influenced me in the creations of these engaging characters and fish out of water storyline. Also, I’m a huge animation fan!

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

The biggest obstacle I faced was finding the right balance between world building and character development. As the pilot takes place in a futuristic world with sea monsters, cellphones, and wizards, it wasn’t always the best to just drop the audience in mid-story. I had to work to build the characters and world first, and then let the story take over.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

I have a passion for working at the intersection of art, technology, and storytelling! I act and I’m actually producing my first short film this month about ‘anxiety’ entitled HeadSpace.

I also really enjoy traveling and meeting new people, hearing their stories. I’m working to visit every state in America within the next year!

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I entered this festival because I love comedy and really enjoyed the idea of having my script performed by actors. Hearing my words come alive on screen definitely beats me creating terrible voices for all of the characters haha.

The initial feedback I received was extremely helpful in sharpening my scenes. The notes from this festival helped me to tighten my script and strengthen my ‘unique’ humor.

Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

Write what makes you laugh. Chances are, it will make others laugh too.


Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson

Comedy Feature Screenplay – MISPRINTS by Adam Preston

Watch the April 2016 winning comedy feature screenplay.

MISPRINTS by Adam Preston

Genre: Comedy

Synopsis:  An emotionally shredded proof reader shares an apartment with a naive intern at a publishing house. When they decide to publish a rejected manuscript by an uncontrollable, priapic, egotistical and superannuated author their little island of dissatisfaction is blown apart.


NARRATOR – Frances Townend
RICHARD – Kaleb Alexander
OLLIE – Jarrid Terrell
DR. ZAHN – David Occhipinti
SARAH – Erynn Brook
JESSICA/FI – Christina Santos
NICK – Rob Notman

Get to writer Adam Preston: 

Matthew Toffolo: The two main leads – who are the inspirations for these characters?

Adam Preston: Richard is a combination of two people I know – one who is very amusing and has a tendency to revel in his own failure and another who is very over-sensitive and damaged. Ollie comes partly from my cousin who escaped London and went to live in a tipi in a Scottish forest.

MT: Dr. Zahn is an actor’s dream. Was there a particular actor you had in mind when writing him?

AP: I don’t believe in writing for a particular actor because I want to create original characters and I think great actors want to do something new each time rather than repeat themselves. There is a rich treasure trove of actors who are the right age to play Zahn. He could be anywhere between 60 and 80 years old. My dream Zahns include Bill Murray, Jeff Bridges, Al Pacino, Robert DeNero, Ben Kingsley, John Malcovich, Dustin Hoffman, Danny DeVito, Harvey Keitel, Bill Nighy, Patrick Stewart – they all have incredible charisma and each would bring something amazing and different to the part – but how do I get the script into these guys hands?

MT: How would you describe this script in one sentence?

AP: It’s a comedy about two prematurely washed up young guys who are changed by an old egomaniacal over-sexed author who refuses to accept he is old.

MT: What is your favorite all-time comedy film?

AP: Some Like It Hot
I recently wrote a blog post about it:

MT: Was it important for this screenplay to have a happy ending?

AP: I tried different endings. Some where I gave the protagonists too much glory and some where I risked leaving the audience on a downer. I feel this ending gets the balance right – their book is a bit of a joke but there’s an eccentric readership out there who are going to find it – and they both get their love lives sorted out and Ollie escapes the big city.

MT: You’ve directed in the past. Do you see yourself directing MISPRINTS too?

AP: If the right director came along I would not stand in their way but I have been developing my directing career in parallel. Last year I made a short called The Last Post which has been showing at festivals all over the world and particularly in the States. Shorts TV have just picked it up for distribution and will be broadcasting it. You can watch the trailer for the short here:

MT: What inspired you to become a writer/director?

AP: I loved movies from an early age but I was a very dreamy kid and lived in my own world. I never thought about where movies came from. When I was at university I suddenly stumbled on the idea that you could make them- I was walking up stairs and a friend (Alex Michaelis – now a very successful architect) said “why not make a film?” It hit me like a thunderbolt. I persuaded my tutor to let me make a movie as my literature dissertation.

MT: Who would you love to have dinner with (dead or alive)?

AP: Billy Wilder, Preston Sturges, John Huston, John Schlesinger, Carol Reed, Woody Allen, Alexander Payne, I could go on…

MT: If you weren’t writing, what would you be doing?

AP: I have worked as a portrait and mural artist and a cartoonist so I guess I’d be doing a combination of those.

MT: What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

AP: I’m looking for opportunities to both improve the script and get some exposure for the project so this ticks both boxes. The quality of the feedback was excellent – you could immediately see that it was written by someone who both loves and understands movies, and more specifically they immediately understood what kind of film I’m trying to make.

MT: Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

AP: I probably need to prove myself a bit more before I start dishing out advice!


Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson


Watch the Comedy 1st Scene Screenplay: THREE PLAY by John-Arthur Ingram

Deadline November 15th for Comedy Film and Writing Festival

Watch COMEDY 1st Scene THREE PLAY:


Oliver, a neurotic who’s hopelessly in love with his best friend Blake, finally comes out to both his shameless girlfriend, Silvia, and Blake. This revelation backfires when Oliver discovers Silvia and Blake are in madly in love. As a final act of desperation, Oliver magically switches bodies with Silvia days before her wedding to Blake.


NARRATOR – Sedina Fiati
Oliver – Jarrid Terrell
Blake – Robert Notman
Silvia – Erynn Brook