TV SPEC Reading of BOB’S BURGERS “Monstrapolis” by Matthew J Gonzalez

Winning Screenplay – BOB’S BURGERS “Monstrapolis”
Written by Matthew J Gonzalez

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Elizabeth Morriss
LINDA – Daniel Chung
LOUISE – Tea Nguyen
TINA/GENE – David Occhipinti
BOB – John Fray
DEBBY – Georgia Grant
KID – Cora Matheson

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Comedy, Family

With a new roller coaster coming to the wharf (the monstrapolis) Louise becomes enamored with it and wants to ride it, even though she’s too short. Luckily though, after Tina asks Bob for a raise and gets denied, Louise manages to get Tina a paying job at the wharf.


Get to know the writer:

What is your TV spec screenplay of the show about?

The spec is based on one of my favorite television shows, Bob’s Burgers. The episode is called “Monstrapolis.” Tina wants to prove her maturity to her family and accepts a job at Wonder Wharf, where the new thrill roller coaster, Monstrapolis, has just opened, but Louise seizes the opportunity to use her sister’s new employment to make Wonder Wharf her personal playground. This all comes to an unexpected climax when Louise manipulates her sister to allow her onto Monstrapolis, which gets stuck in the middle of the ride. Bob and Linda are forced to rely on Gene to pick up the slack Tina, and Louise, left behind.

Why does this episode spec fit into the context of the series?

The characters are true to their voices and the humor fits perfectly in one of their seasons. The jokes are specific to their characters (ex. Gene’s buffoonery and Louise’s ability to manipulate Tina). The show ends on a familiar note of their strength as a family.

Tina proves herself as a worker and gets everyone, on the ride, to work together to get off Monstrapolis. In true Bob’s Burger fashion, Tina’s plan doesn’t work, but it shows her maturity through out the episode. Louise sees the error of her ways and apologizes for taken advantage of Tina, even admiring her strength when others doubted her.

The episode also features some of the series regulars, and favorites, like Mr. Fischoeder and Teddy.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Hilarious and fun.

What TV show do you keep watching over and over again?

Besides Bob’s Burger, It’s a toss up between Rick and Morty and The Office, both different comedies, but strong and rich with flavor and style.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

I have been working about three months on this spec. It took me a few weeks to get the first draft written, and then I set it down for a bit. I did a couple of rewrites a few days later.

How many stories have you written?

In terms of screenplays, I have one featured screenplay, two pilots, three spec scripts, and about ten short screenplays that I plan to shoot in the future.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

“California Dreamin’” by Bobby Womack. Such a smooth song with a nice rhythm. It’s one of those songs you can play and lose yourself within the song. I don’t constantly listen to it, but it’s probably the only song I never skipped on my playlist.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Getting the humor right. I love the show and the characters, but making the humor believable within the world of Bob’s Burgers was a fun challenge. This is the reason I love writing comedies. It’s not just that Tina says “Uhhhh” or Bob’s moments of desperation whenever the kids do something wrong. The humor is deeply rooted in the series and some jokes are brilliantly layered that viewers may not see it until a second viewing, I argue to rewatch the episode “The Belchies” to see what I’m referring too. Again, I wouldn’t call it difficult, but it definitely took a great amount studying scripts and episodes.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

I’m a filmmaker. I love getting my hands on a camera, getting actors together, and creating movie magic. The whole process is intriguing to me, from shooting to editing. The creative process doesn’t stop at the script. To this date I have shot four short films, in which I wrote, edited, and directed.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I believed in my episode “Monstrapolis.” It was funny and it felt authentic to the series, plus I had a blast working on it. I wanted to see if my spec had a chance, and graciously, the fine people at the Festival for Comedy thought so.

The reception was great. Obviously hearing positive feedback is always a joy, but the criticism was key to me. This is what makes me into a better writer. I definitely absorbed the information and applied it, not only to any further rewrites of “Monstrapolis,” but in all of my works.

Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

It’s cliché to say keep writing, but believe in you and always looks at everything subject in different angles. If you’re writing something original, then show the viewers a different side of a subject. We are in the golden age of television and many people actually want to hear what others have to say. Use this medium and further extend your divergent voice. I write comedies, because the world can pretty dark. It could use a laugh once and awhile

TV CONTESTSUBMIT your Best Scene Screenplay or TV SPEC Script
Voted #1 TV Contest in North America.
Screenplay CONTESTSUBMIT your Best Scene Screenplay or FEATURE Script
FULL FEEDBACK on all entries. Get your script performed
Screenplay CONTESTFIRST SCENE (first 10pgs) Screenplay CONTEST
Submit the first stages of your film and get full feedback!

 

*****

Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Editor: John Johnson

Camera Operator: Kierston Drier

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

 

TV CONTESTSUBMIT your Best Scene Screenplay or TV SPEC Script
Voted #1 TV Contest in North America.
Screenplay CONTESTSUBMIT your Best Scene Screenplay or FEATURE Script
FULL FEEDBACK on all entries. Get your script performed
Screenplay CONTESTFIRST SCENE (first 10pgs) Screenplay CONTEST
Submit the first stages of your film and get full feedback!

COMEDY BEST SCENE Reading – SANDWICH by Deborah Klika

Watch the January 2017 Winning Comedy Best Scene Reading.

Best Scene from the screenplay SANDWICH Screenplay
Written by Deborah Klika

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Nick Wicht
SUSIE – Val Cole
DIANA – Catherine D’Angelo
WILL – David Straus
SURVEYOR – Gabriel Darku

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Comedy, Animation

Centres on the lives of Suzie, writer, mother of three, her mother, feminist academic Diana, best friend and ex corporate warrior Toni, and the depressive yet helpful neighbour Will.

Get to know the winning writer:

What is your screenplay about?

Life in the suburbs when everybody needs you and nobody wants you.

What genres does your screenplay under?

TV comedy

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

It’s Blue Velvet meets Modern Family and exposes a darkly comic view of what goes on between the hours of 9-3 in suburbia. When the cat’s at work the mice……

How would you describe this script in two words?

Blue Suburbia

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

The Apartment by Billy Wilder

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

On and off for eight years

How many stories have you written?

Three TV comedy pilots, two more as developer/creator

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

When living in suburbia I asked what happens when you lose the identity you had in the workplace.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

That feedback from commissioners was “why would anyone want to see a comedy about women in their forties?” from women in their thirties with no children. A lack of knowledge or understanding about that time in one’s life.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Teaching, comedy and screenwriting research.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I was attracted to this festival because it offered readings with actors and I was keen to see how the script “read.” The feedback was thorough and perceptive, it focused on the comedy and how to make that stronger rather than the fact it was about “women.”

Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

Keep at it. Get lots of feedback and even if you don’t agree with the feedback there is a reason the reader felt compelled to comment on that aspect or at the point, so ask yourself why.

****
Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson


TV CONTESTSUBMIT your Best Scene Screenplay or TV SPEC Script
Voted #1 TV Contest in North America.
Screenplay CONTESTSUBMIT your Best Scene Screenplay or FEATURE Script
FULL FEEDBACK on all entries. Get your script performed
Screenplay CONTESTFIRST SCENE (first 10pgs) Screenplay CONTEST
Submit the first stages of your film and get full feedback!

 

COMEDY SHORT SCREENPLAY – MODERN LOVE by Hannah Dillon

Watch the January 2017 Winning Comedy Short Screenplay Reading.

Best Scene from the screenplay MODERN LOVE Screenplay
Written by Hannah Dillon

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Charles Gordon
BONNIE – Shannon McNally
GRANDMA – Val Cole
SANDRA – Catherine D’Angelo
JOEL – Nick Wicht
BILL – David Straus
NOAH – Gabriel Darku

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Sci-Fi, Comedy, Romance, Family

In 2065, Sandra brings her Artificially Intelligent boyfriend home to meet her grandmother, who struggles to accept him.


Get to know the winning writer:

What is your screenplay about?

When Sandra brings her Artificially Intelligent boyfriend home for dinner, her family struggles to accept him. In addition to the nerves that come with meeting a significant other’s family, this boyfriend has to overcome a deep-rooted prejudice against robots. Great. Let’s see how Sandra’s overbearing, Jewish grandmother reacts.

What genres does your screenplay under?

Sci-Fi, Comedy, Family

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

This story exposes an important social issue in an engaging, digestible way. It’s really about the struggles of any “unconventional” couple (LGBTQ, interracial, etc.), and the cyclical nature of social progress from generation to generation. Anyone who has ever been rejected by his or her significant other’s family will relate to this story. More importantly, people who feel you should only date “your own,” may even be able to take a step back and question that impulse. I believe this story could have a great impact if made into a film.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Provocative and silly.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

When Harry Met Sally.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

I worked on various iterations of this story for about eight months. I am currently working on a pilot inspired by the two main characters and their relationship.

How many stories have you written?

I have written three feature screenplays, many more short screenplays, short stories, poems, and songs. I am constantly writing.

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

Years ago, a family member of mine did not approve of my former partner, and it stuck with me. I was very close with that family member, and was not expecting his negative reaction. Others told me to “let it go,” because he was old, and from “a different time.” I tried to imagine: If I was very old, and my granddaughter brought home a lover, is there any kind of person I would find unsuitable? Any kind of religion? Race? Sexual identity? As I wracked my brain, the only thing I could think was, “as long as it’s human.” That’s when it clicked: if my hypothetical granddaughter were to bring home a robot, I would, in fact, question that love, and my hate would sound all too familiar. It also sounded ridiculous when aimed at a robot. I thought, what a perfectly absurd metaphor to use to expose the idiocy of real prejudice. At the end of the day, it’s just fear of the unfamiliar.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

There are a lot of big themes at play here, and a lot of different ways to tell this story. I had to explore several avenues before I found the one that felt right.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

I love music (which I also write) and comedy, and care deeply about social justice.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I saw a few videos of previous readings, and I loved the idea. The initial feedback was very helpful.

Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

My only advice is to write what’s in your gut. It’s the only thing worth reading, and the only voice nobody else has. Plus, it’s in your gut—don’t let that fester.

****
Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

TV CONTESTSUBMIT your Best Scene Screenplay or TV SPEC Script
Voted #1 TV Contest in North America.
Screenplay CONTESTSUBMIT your Best Scene Screenplay or FEATURE Script
FULL FEEDBACK on all entries. Get your script performed
Screenplay CONTESTFIRST SCENE (first 10pgs) Screenplay CONTEST
Submit the first stages of your film and get full feedback!

 

2016 TV Screenplay Winners

Submit your Comedy Screenplay or Film to the Festival Today: http://festivalforcomedy.com

See the TV Screenplay Comedy Stories. Click the link and watch the winning videos:

ACTORTV SPEC of the show RICK & MORTY
December 2016 Reading
Written by Matthew Feldman
ACTORTV PILOT – MIDLIFE CRISIS
December 2016 Reading
Written by Erica Barfield Peterson

ACTORFAN FICTION Spec – HOW I MET YOUR MOTHER
December 2016 Reading
Written by Eugene Ramos
ACTORFAN FICTION Screenplay – GILLIGAN’S ISLAND OF THE DEAD
November 2016 Reading
Written by Jerry Kokich

ACTORTV SPEC Screenplay – UNBREAKABLE KIMMY SCHMIDT
November 2016 Reading
Written by Sarah Cassell
ACTORTV PILOT Screenplay: EMMETT IN PEOPLELAND
October 2016 Reading
Written by Larry Hankin

ACTORTV PILOT Screenplay: THE VISA
October 2016 Reading
Written by Conrad Haynes

ACTORTV PILOT Screenplay: WILLOWWOOD
October 2016 Reading
Written by Christopher Locke

ACTORTV SPEC Screenplay: UNBREAKABLE KIMMY SCHMIDT Kimmy is a VIP
October 2016 Reading
Written by Mike Miller

ACTORWEBSERIES Screenplay: TREVOR AND EVOR
September 2016 Reading
Written by Sasha Siljanovic

ACTORTV SPEC Screenplay: MODERN FAMILY
September 2016 Reading
Written by Chai Karve

ACTORTV PILOT Screenplay – RICK & MORTY “The Rickgotiator”
August 2016 Reading
Written by David Cryan

ACTORTV PILOT Screenplay – DIGITAL NATIVES
August 2016 Reading
Written by Adam Preston

ACTORTV SPEC Screenplay – BROOKLYN NINE-NINE
June 2016 Reading
Written by Linsen Oyosa

ACTORTV PILOT Screenplay – WILD MAGIC
June 2016 Reading
Written by Julie Nichols

ACTORTV PILOT Screenplay – SMITHEREENS
May 2016 Reading
Written by Hershel D. Rephun

ACTORTV SPEC Screenplay – THE MINDY PROJECT “Culture Club”
May 2016 Reading
Written by Katie Bero

ACTORTV PILOT Screenplay – MARRIAGE EQUALITY
April 2016 Reading
Written by Jamie Pierce

ACTORTV PILOT Screenplay – MAILROOMIES
April 2016 Reading
Written by Jacques Edeline

ACTORTV PILOT Screenplay – REC’D
March 2016 Reading
Written by Chris Courtney Martin

ACTORTV SPEC Screenplay – THE BIG BANG THEORY
February 2016 Reading
Written by David Minaskanian

ACTORTV SPEC – UNBREAKABLE KIMMY SCHMIDT
January 2016 Reading
Written by Jen Turriff

 

 

 

 

****

Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

2016 FEATURE Screenplay Winners

Submit your Comedy Screenplay or Film to the Festival Today: http://festivalforcomedy.com

See the FEATURE Screenplay Comedy Stories. Click the link and watch the winning videos:

ACTORFEATURE Screenplay – TRIAL & ERIN
December 2016 Reading
Written by Larry Shulruff
ACTORFEATURE Screenplay – DUE SOUTH
November 2016 Reading
Written by Even R. Schullery

ACTORFEATURE Screenplay: LAWN BOYS
September 2016 Reading
Written by Steve Cleary

ACTORFEATURE Screenplay – THE CHARLOTTETOWN JACKHAMMER
July 2016 Reading
Written by Marc Lalonde

ACTORFeature Screenplay – DEAD NORTH
April 2016 Reading
Written by Alexander Nachaj

ACTORFeature Screenplay – MISPRINTS
April 2016 Reading
Written by Adam Preston

ACTORFeature Screenplay – FOUR FOR THE BORDER
February 2016 Reading
Written by Toby Roberts

ACTORFeature Screenplay – HENRIETTA’S ODYSSEY
February 2016 Reading
Written by L.R. Whittinger

 

 

 

****

Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

2016 BEST SCENE Screenplay Winners

Submit your Comedy Screenplay or Film to the Festival Today: http://festivalforcomedy.com

See the Best Scene Screenplay Comedy Stories. Click the link and watch the winning videos:

ACTORBEST SCENE Screenplay – DEATH OF A LADIES MAN
December 2016 Reading
Written by Salim Allybokus
ACTORBEST SCENE Screenplay – TINK
December 2016 Reading
Written by Edward Ybarra

ACTORBEST SCENE Screenplay – SERVED COLD
December 2016 Reading
Written by WL (Bud) Gorman
ACTORBEST SCENE Screenplay – TAKE TWO
December 2016 Reading
Written by Mary Skiles

ACTORBEST SCENE Screenplay – MY LIFE WITH STELLA KANE
December 2016 Reading
Written by Linda Morganstein
ACTORBEST SCENE Screenplay – OLD LADY DILEMMAS
December 2016 Reading
Written by Lora Ellen McKinney

ACTORBEST SCENE Screenplay – WAITING TO CRUMBLE
November 2016 Reading
Written by John Ott
ACTORBEST SCENE Screenplay: LOONATOONA
September 2016 Reading
Written by Shockadelic

ACTORBEST SCENE Screenplay – 3 FAMILIES
September 2016 Reading
Written by J.D. Poland

ACTORBEST SCENE Screenplay – DUE SOUTH
July 2016 Reading
Written by Evan Schullery

ACTORBest Scene Screenplay – AS LUCK WOULD HAVE IT
June 2016 Reading
Written by Philip Naiman

ACTORBest Scene Screenplay – LE CHAT NOIR
April 2016 Reading
Written by Paula Sewell

ACTORBest Scene Screenplay – MISPRINTS
February 2016 Reading
Written by Adam Preston

 

 

 

 

****

Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

TV PILOT – THE TEXAS CHAINSAW MIDLIFE CRISIS by Erica Barfield Peterson

THE TEXAS CHAINSAW MIDLIFE CRISIS TV Pilot
Written by Erica Peterson
Read 10 Questions with the writer

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Michelle Alexander
MARK – Ucal Shillingford
LEATHERFACE – Noah Casey
JANICE/ALEXIS – Angela Cavallin
MADISON/CHRISSY – Dana Thody
PHARMACIST – Sean Ballantyne
BETT – Chris Reid Geisler

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Comedy, Horror

On his 40th birthday, Leatherface has decided it’s time to “find his truth,” so he reaches out to the one person who can help him… his only victim that got away.

Get to know the winning writer:

1. What is your screenplay about?

It’s the story of Leatherface (from The Texas Chainsaw Massacre) turning 40 and realizing the life he’s been living may not be the life he wants. Maybe he doesn’t want to hack people to death. Maybe he doesn’t want to eat people at every meal. Maybe he loves candle making but will never know until he goes on a journey to find his truth, and the only way he knows how to do that is with the aid of his one victim who got away – Mark. Mark survived, lived to tell the tale and even wrote a book about how he learned to live his truth because of what he went through. It’s an Odd Couple story in which both Mark and Leatherface realize how much they can truly help each other find their truths.

2. How does this episode fit into the context of the series?

I think it makes a great buddy comedy. You have two people trying to figure out how they want to live their lives and can only do so with the help of the other. One being a semi-successful self-help author and the other is a murderous psychopath. Each episode the two characters can have new goals of things they either will or won’t want as a part of their new lives. Leatherface has never dated before, never driven — basically never done much other than kill people, so there’s definitely an engine for plenty of stories. Mark is scared of life and wants to learn how to live it to the fullest which is also a great engine for many stories. I think it’s something we’ve never seen before in terms of pairing comedy and horror in the odd couple sense for a TV series.

3. How would you describe this script in two words?

Delightfully Psycho.

4. What TV show do you watch over and over again?

Arrested Development is by far my favorite. That and anything that profiles serial killers.

5. How long have you been working on this screenplay?

I worked on this particular pilot for three months.

6. How many stories have you written?

I’ve written 10 specs and 7 pilots.

7. What motivated you to write this screenplay?

I’m obsessed with the genre blend of horror and comedy. I had just seen “What We Do In The Shadows” and was like, “That’s what I want to do!” I kind of knew that all along because my favorite movie is “Young Frankenstein,” and I adore “Shaun of the Dead” but it just clicked that day, and I knew I had found my niche. I’m also so fascinated by Leatherface because we never hear him speak and I always wondered — would his life be different if he was taken in by a more “normal” family. Does he ever want to tell his mama to shove off cause he just wants to listen to music or kiss a girl? — so I wanted to explore the question of what would he be like if he came to that realization himself.

8. What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

None, really. This was one of those times where I loved every moment of writing this because it’s something I am passionate about so it made it fun. I couldn’t wait to finish to get feedback and make it better and better.

9. Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

I love to dance (was a semi-professional football cheerleader — will not tell you the team name because there are embarrassing photos out there), animals, fighting for the rights of others, making people laugh, sleep and donuts (GOD I LOVE DONUTS).

10. What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I wanted to see what people thought of my script. Sometimes you give your writing to people and worry that they’re just being nice because they know you — with this — you didn’t have to be nice, and you were wonderful! The feedback was great and encouraging. Now I just gotta get those rights from Tobe Hooper!

11. Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

Just keep writing and always write. Write what you’re passionate about – not what you think other people want to read. Read scripts – lots of them. Nail down structure and story — if you can get those two things done well then the rest is a piece of cake. Also, forget doubting yourself. You’re not here to please anyone but yourself. If you’re writing to make money and wouldn’t write if you couldn’t make money — maybe you shouldn’t be a writer. And always be willing to take feedback — especially if you get the same note from several people. The goal is to get better and not think that you are already the best.

***

Producer/Director: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson


TV CONTESTSUBMIT your Best Scene Screenplay or TV SPEC Script
Voted #1 TV Contest in North America.
SCREENPLAY CONTESTSUBMIT your Best Scene Screenplay or FEATURE Script
FULL FEEDBACK on all entries. Get your script performed
SCREENPLAY CONTESTFIRST SCENE (first 10pgs) SCREENPLAY CONTEST
Submit the first stages of your film and get full feedback!