Winning COMEDY SHORT Screenplay – ALMOST NEVER TOO LATE, by Jeffrey Howe

Genre: Comedy, Sci-Fi, Adventure

In suburbia, a toddler plays innocently in a sandpit. Meanwhile next door, an android called Steve has arrived from the future with a mission to kill the child before it grows into an evil tyrant. But before he can do so, he is caught up in a fight with Beth, another time traveller, who claims that Steve’s actions will cause the future timeline.

CAST LIST:

Narrator: Carina Cojeen
Steve: David Occhipinti
Beth: Norma Dunphy
Evil Imperion: Dennis Barham
Ajax One: Fabio Abreu

Get to know the writer: 

1. What is your screenplay about?

A succession of time travelers attempts to change history–or to stop each others’ attempts–until their original target takes matters into his own three-year-old hands.

2. What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Sci-fi (parody), comedy

3. Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Principal photography would take a day, tops. A fourteen-year old could *probably* do the simulated computer graphics. 
*double checks with fourteen-year old son* 
Make that *definitely*.

4. How would you describe this script in two words?

Briefly amusing. 

5. What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

“The Little Mermaid.” Don’t judge me, it was a weird time in my life. 

6. How long have you been working on this screenplay?

About a day and a half. I wrote it mostly to stay limber waiting for the NYCMidnight finals (a timed scriptwriting contest), since I had never written short-short comedy. Well, not since high school.

7. How many stories have you written?

If we’re including novels and short stories along with various length scripts…thirty-something that I’ve finished. Maybe forty.

8. What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

At the moment, “The Hell of It,” off the “Phantom of the Paradise” soundtrack. An underappreciated Paul Williams classic. Later today, who knows?

9. What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Self-imposed: I wanted to finish a workable draft in one sitting (see number 6 above).

10. Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Dissecting other people’s writing. You may know this as “reading” or “watching stuff.”

11. You entered your screenplay via FilmFreeway. What has been your experiences working with the submission platform site?

Generally good. The one time a festival contest turned out to be a scam, FF refunded the entry fee. Same for contests that canceled. The review system needs some tweaks, though–right now a festival or contest can kind of be held hostage by a hostile reviewer.

12. What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

The working screenwriter in my writers’ group said the script was good enough for a comedy-centric contest. I guess that counts as initial feedback? In any case, it was reassuring. Writing comedy scares the crap out of me.

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Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Director: Kierston Drier
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

Camera Operator: Mary Cox

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COMEDY Best Scene Screenplay of BRENDA IN DHARMALAND, by Anne M Robinson

 

Genre: Comedy, Drama, Romance

A softball coach with anger management issues becomes entranced by the benefits of meditative yoga.

CAST LIST:

Narrator: Carina Cojeen
Edwina: Norma Dunphy
Announcer: David Occhipinti
Edgar: Nick Baillie
Pete: Dennis Barham
Ted: Fabio Abreu

Get to know the writer: 

What is your screenplay about?

A woman with anger issues seeks inner peace.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Comedy

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Enlightening entertainment! The audience will identify with the feelings of the characters, if not their actions.  If Brenda can have an epiphany and find inner peace, then anyone can.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Quirky. Offbeat.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Maybe SOME LIKE IT HOT

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

3 lifetimes

How many stories have you written?

I’ve written 4 screenplays and 1 pilot.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

Dancing in the Moonlight

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

It’s not the finishing, it’s the rewriting…..

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

I love to tango, ride my motorcycle, hang with my cats, practice yoga, hit the beach with my husband…

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

It’s a comedy festival. I write comedy.  My initial reaction to the feedback was that it was well thought out, clear, objective and rang true. I do get derailed from the plot. All the time. I need a leash.

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Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Director: Kierston Drier
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

Camera Operator: Mary Cox

COMEDY Best Scene Screenplay of VAMPIRE ACADEMY, by Melissa Birks

 

Genre: Comedy, Sci-Fi

In a world where mortals and vampires share an uneasy co-existence, an unemployed young woman enrolls in a trade college that teaches vampire skills, only to discover the college is actually a front for a sinister plot to overthrow humans.

CAST LIST:

Narrator: Carina Cojeen
Claudette: Lindsay Gerro
Ad Narrator: Nick Baillie
Student #1: Fabio Abreu
Student #2: Dennis Barham
Recruiter: Norma Dunphy

Get to know the writer: 

What is your screenplay about?

In a world where vampires and mortals co-exist, an underemployed young woman attends a trade school that teaches vampire skills to mortal students…only to discover that the school is engaging in a nefarious plot to secretly turn mortals into the undead. This screenplay is about the heroine’s journey from not believing in her own value to embracing her self worth.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Sci-fi/fantasy

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

This screenplay should be made into a movie because 1. It features a flawed yet smart and resourceful heroine 2. It features a unique world where vampires and mortals live together in an uneasy truce 3. It features a world where you can attend a trade school to get vampire skills that could help you thrive in certain careers. Think dental hygiene and phlebotomy.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Vampire quirkiness.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Probably It’s a Wonderful Life.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

I wrote several drafts of this screenplay over two years.

How many stories have you written?

I have written seven screenplays (first drafts).

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

Hard to pin this down. I like a lot of ‘80s classic rock (when I was growing up, it wasn’t yet “classic”). I’m also a big fan of Christmas carols; because they are seasonal, they are, I suppose, the songs I’ve listened to most often in my life. I like the polarity of “I Believe in Father Christmas” and “Here Comes Santa Claus.”

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

I struggled with how to raise the stakes for my heroine, Claudette. I struggled with keeping the momentum of the second act, including developing a clear midpoint.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Animals. I think the only animal I may dislike would be the mosquito. Otherwise, I love all animals.

You entered your screenplay via FilmFreeway. What has been your experiences working with the submission platform site?

This is an excellent submission platform site. It opens your world to a wide range of contests in all genres, locations, and sizes. I recommend it.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I liked the idea of seeing if my logline could generate any interest. The feedback that I received was constructive, targeted, and helpful. Much appreciated!

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Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Director: Kierston Drier
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

Camera Operator: Mary Cox

Short Comedy Screenplay Reading – Gary’s Girls by Mckenzie Trent

Watch the April 2016 Winning Comedy Short Screenplay

Short Screenplay – Gary’s Girls by Mckenzie Trent

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Comedy, Drama

A young woman with too many bumps in the road is in the process of giving up on life when an unlikely source, her dad’s new girlfriend and her former high school resident mean girl, pushes her out of her comfort zone.

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Sean Kaufman
STEPHANIE – Sandra Krstin
MEREDITH – Kiran Friesen
GARY – Michael Lake
HOST – Noah Casey
CARL – Dennis Barham

Get to know writer Mckenzie Trent:

1. What is your short screenplay about?

A young woman is forced to go to dinner with her dad’s new girlfriend, who happens to be a former school nemesis.

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Ultimately it’s a story about an unlikely friendship between two women. For it to be funny and still a woman’s character story is a tougher accomplishment these days. If expanded, I think it could be quite an adventure for these women and their goofy man in common.

This story has a lot going for it. How would you describe this script in two words?

Rival comedy

What TV show do you keep watching over and over again?

The Office, Arrested Development

This is a very tight, emotionally engaging and fun screenplay. How long have you been working on this screenplay?

About a year

How many stories have you written?

Too many? Probably 6 or 7 that were finished and shot.

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

A really fun and successful improvised scene in a class. I just couldn’t let the idea go afterwards.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

It was originally a small web series and expanding it into a longer short provided its own challenges with character development and story pacing.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Acting! And I’m really into my women’s basketball league.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I was looking for guidance and some approval that I was on the right track. I agreed with most of the feedback.

Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

Keep writing. And write what you love, not what you think other people want to read. Force them to pay attention to your material first.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson